读后续写专题8

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

About a half-mile behind our Minnesota farm lay a pond. In summer, my brother Harry and I would run through a stand of oak trees（橡树） to skip stones there. The pond wore a collar of black mud（一圈黑泥）. It was not a place for swimming.

In late summer, the pond would be covered by a green and bubbly scum（起泡的浮渣）. Sometimes a strong, unpleasant smell rose from it. We stayed away.

When winter came, the pond was once again an inviting place. One day when ice covered it, Harry said to me, “Try walking across.”

The ice looked solid. No water showed through it, but I hesitated. “Go ahead.” Harry urged. “Try it. You’re lighter than I am. If the ice holds, we can run and slide carefully on it. It’ll be fun.” I wanted to please Harry, and I thought about the fun of a long slide on the ice. I began to slide across the pond.

In the middle of the pond, the ice gave way with a sudden crack（裂缝）! I stretched out（伸展）my arms. The next thing I knew I was hanging on to the edge of a hole in the ice by arms outstretched on the ice. From my shoulders down I hung in icy water. I thought of the bottom of the pond. I knew it would be black and awful down there, full of mud and maybe rotting creatures. 

I tried to climb out of the hole, but when I got a knee on the ice, it broke like window glass. Again and again I tried to get out. Again and again the ice broke into pieces. The hole widened. I was wearing a coat of heavy material. As it became completely wet, it dragged me down. I was tired of the struggle and rested with my arms stretched out on the ice.

I looked at Harry on shore. He seemed rooted to the spot. “I can’t get out!” I screamed when I caught some breath.

注意：

1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；

Paragraph 1:

Harry turned and ran from the pond. _________________________________________________

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Paragraph 2:

The moment I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over. ______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

读后续写预习导学案Through the ice

Preview task:

Task 1．Read the story and answer the following questions

Who were the characters?__________________________________________________________

Where did the accident happen?_____________________________________________________

When did the accident happen?_____________________________________________________

 

Task 2.  Read for the plot

Events:

Setting背景_____ Inciting incident引发事件____ Rising action____  ____ Climax高潮_____

 

Task 3.  Read for the changes of feelings

 

Task 4.  Predict the development of the story

About Para1

1.       What was my response to his leaving?

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2.       Did he really leave me alone?

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3.       How was I rescued?

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About Para2

Try to raise some questions for the development of the story

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读后续写教学设计Through the ice

高二英语备课组

主题语境：人与自然

语篇类型：故事性文章

授课时长：一课时（每课时40分钟）

文本分析

这是一篇冰上救人的故事。Harry和“我”兄弟两人常常穿过一排橡树到农场后面的池塘扔石头。夏天的池塘恶臭难闻，而到了冬天塘面结冰。“我”在Harry的驱使下走上了冰面，最终随着冰面裂开，“我”掉入冰洞。几番挣扎无果，“我”向Harry求助，却只看到Harry跑开了。

救人类型的故事是高考读后续写故事类型之一，选取这一类型的故事进行训练旨在帮助学生熟悉话题，从5W1H入手梳理故事情节及人物情感变化，通过两个段首句及问题链来预测后续情节的发展，帮助学生养成阅读类似话题的思维能力。

故事发展暗藏伏笔。例如 “…run through a stand of oak trees（橡树） to skip stones there”，留心的同学会在后面“Harry跑开”时联想到Harry可能是去取树枝来救“我”；又如环环相扣的两个段首句，根据 “The moment I crashed through the kitchen door…”可推断“我”一定是获救了，再结合“Harry turned and ran from the pond.”，可以知道Harry跑开是去取东西来救“我”的。此外，文本语言生动形象，学生在续写时语言也应尽量生动，让续写故事与原文尽量神似。

学情分析

授课对象是高二年级美术班（2）班学生，学习态度较认真，学习热情较高，但英语基础一般，思维活跃度和想象力还有待提高。所以大量梳理故事情节及相关语料的准备工作须在在课前预习完成。

Teaching objectives:

By the end of this period, the students will be able to:

1.         analyze the narrative’s elements, the plot and the changes of the characters’ feelings;

2.         predict the plot logically based on the given sentences, and skills of raising questions;

3.         use more specific body language and action language to express emotion vividly;

4.         end the story reasonably by standing in the characters’ position (age, feelings, etc.) and combine the story itself (an experience)

 

Teaching important points:

Understand the clues of the plot and the changes of the characters’ feelings

Teaching difficult points:

Develop the story based on the given sentences and skills of asking questions.

Teaching materials:

Multimedia; learning paper

 

 

 

 

Teaching procedures:

 

 

 

A possible version:

He turned and ran from the pond. Staring at his familiar figure out of sight, I wondered: “Is he running for help, or is he running away?” Disappointment and scare beat me out of breath. The icy water seemed to pierce my skin. I was anxious to climb out by myself, but in vain. After what seemed to be centuries of waiting, I was nearly about to give up when Harry stormed back with a large and black oak branch, “Grab it.” Flopping to his stomach, he pushed the branch before him and wriggled toward me. Stretching out my arms, I seized the oak branch with all my strength, crawled carefully out of the hole inch by inch and was eventually dragged out of the icy water by Harry. What a narrow escape! Then we stumbled home, with my clothes dripping(滴水)and my overshoes squishing(发出嘎吱声).

I crashed through the kitchen door, sobbing, mum rushed over. Taking off my coat and clothes from me, she gave me a quick bath and then nimbly wrapped a thick blanket over me to stop me from feeling cold; meanwhile she gave me a cup of milk to warm me up. I tearfully complained to her about all that had happened. Mum comforted me and blamed Harry for getting his younger brother into such a trouble. With his head dropping, Harry made an apology to me. I was temporarily relieved and decided to forgive Harry. Without his rescue, I would have died. But I would never forget the life-risking experience and never act so blindly again.